Script Draft 3 - Evaluative Notes

After reading and analyzing my third draft script, with my teacher, two things arose from our discussions, firstly was the fact that Luke trying to make a move with Alice, and the characters relationship wasn't played up enough so recommendations for me to apply to my fourth draft, would be within the opening scenes, get Luke to make a shot move on Alice and have her shoot him down quickly, which also helps create audience feeling.

Secondly, was that later on in the script, Luke's time spent watching and deliberating on whether to help Alice or not, needs to become longer, to give the audience a feel of how tough his decision is to make, plus it allows for the building of tension.